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Burning the Fields

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The air is
conflicted by
contrasting scents:

the sharpness of fire,
the cool, gritty mud.
You feel the heat

behind Plexiglas
windows, as earthbound
thunderheads

unfurl like chiffon
hems from a
cream couture dress.

The sparks are licking
and biting at the
clay colored sky.

She would look perfect
just standing at the
edge of the fire.
Full title: Burning the Fields at the End of September

My teacher said he wanted to see more of the fire. Can you see it? :|

I think I should drop the fifth stanza...

HARSH CRITIQUE PLZ.
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shiyonin's avatar
WAM. A SHOT FOR STOP MOTION IS INSPIRED.